Production Report 11a

This post is dedicated to the before and after pieces of my essay that I will be writing!

Here is the outline part of my introduction:

Introduction

~Open with my personal experiences with playing with Barbie's as a kid.

~Introduce topic in question and how it came to be


Here is the edited version:

I remember a time where the world was a place of laughter and endless fun. It was a time where I woke up at seven am and had no problem doing so because I would get up, go to my Scooby-Doo themed highchair and have my favorite breakfast: microwavable pancakes. I’d go to a place called Melino Elementary School for 6 hours and run around on the playground with friends, then come home and play with my favorite toy: Barbie. Her blonde hair that seemed to be spun out of gold and her seemingly endless amount of clothing made a playtime of three hours seem like three minutes. As I grew up with Barbie at my side I began to notice small things in myself that did not quite match her perfect form, like my bigger than usual belly or very long dusty blonde hair. As a child, we have a sense of naivety that follows our every thought, but that naivety begins to go away as we experience new things, one of those things being the issue of body image. We often compare ourselves to others, seeing them as ‘better’ than us. This feeling of comparison often happens at a younger age, starting when we start to play with things that resemble ourselves, such as a Barbie doll. Mattel has recently come out with three new Barbie dolls named “tall”, “petite”, and “curvy” to try and alleviate this issue in young girls or boys. However, as with any change, this new addition has caused some controversy and debates over the effectiveness of these new dolls. Throughout the years, Barbie dolls have been an icon and role model for girls across the world. The new addition of Barbie dolls in this recent year of 2016, is a large step in the right direction for body positivity, for it allows girls to play with dolls that do not fit an unattainable mold, giving them a role model that praises different body types instead of knocking them down.

1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?
   I used the idea of a "hook" for the beginning part of the introduction because that often draws the reader in, wanting to read more of the work. I also made a working thesis that was defendable at the end of the introduction which was another important part of form. As far as conventions go, I made sure I didn't use any contractions or numbers because those are parts of the conventions of an essay.
   
   
2. How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?
   Writing an introduction is one of my favorite parts of an essay, but I wanted this one to be perfect so I thought a lot about including each sentence and where to put each sentence. I also found it hard to make a strong thesis because that has always been one of my struggling points.